When writing about art it can be difficult to get the images
across to the reader but in this case it worked perfectly. Even though I could
not visually see the art that was in the story, it was described in such a way,
that I could easily imagine it. It was also very easy to understand and relate
to the protagonist. He had a clear objective, recreate the portrait and thus
prove that he could still create beauty, and a logical mean of achieving it,
paint until it’s perfect. There was not anything that was forced or untruthful
about it. Because the idea is simple it feels real.
On
page 4 you talk about the accident where he lost his hand and I feel like that
is unnecessary. We already know he lost his hand in an accident of some kind,
having it explained breaks from the action of painting and just sounds like
exposition for the sake of it. A little ambiguity is fine, we know the basics, and
that’s all we need to know.
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