what wasn't said workshop

What Wasn’t Said is a bromatic story that went wrong. It seems like these two guys had a special relationship until they had a falling out. If that's the central part of the story then that moment needs to be bigger. It’s weird that the narrator would stop being friends with Peers because he picked a guy up. I think Peers needs to do something more outrageous, because being a little embarrassed is a weak excuse to stop being friends with someone. It makes the friendship itself look weak if that’s all it took to end it. It could be small if this was just the latest of a series of events, a straw that broke the camels back.

One part that was out of place was the dream sequence. Peers has a dream about a shark like Virgin Mary and the narrator is trying to drive into her. It doesn’t seem to connect to the story or characters at all. If we knew Peers was religious then the virgin part would make sense, but the driving aspect is out of nowhere. If the story is going to have a dream either the symbolism has to work for the story, or the motivation behind telling it does. Is Peers telling this strange story so the narrator will talk to him about it? If so that should be made clearer.