Pretend games is about two girls playing and what happens
when the playing becomes real. There doesn’t seem to be a clear conflict or
resolution with the story. If the conflict is that E wants to run away then it
ends with her being found, if it’s about how these girls want to switch lives
then we need to see more of Tay. Since this is a third person narrator it can
go into Tay’s thoughts about E and her life. But there should to be one
over-arcing conflict that the characters try to resolve otherwise what’s the
point of their actions.
I would have liked to see more about Tay’s life. Why does
she hide on the shed roof and leave with De De? Who’s truck was in the
driveway? Maybe a section that follows Tay after E leaves that shows what her
life is like might explain why she is running away. There is a lot of potential
in a story where both girls envy the other’s life, when in reality both are
flawed and painful. Prince and pauper.
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